Reflection Literacy T2 W8

This week for literacy we have been doing a description about a family member, I did it on my sister. This is mine. My goal was to yse more FANBOYS to extend my sentences.  What do you think?

Mackenzie has strawberry blonde hair,she has tiny ears,she has flower earrings,her eyes are brown,her teeth are white but pointy,her nose is tiny.My favorite memory is when we went to the park together and we were playing together.